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NESS COMMITTED SUICIDE - Berry - 03-17-2013 Ehh,don't know how forums are to close,so i'm posting it here. The Original Version(the lame one) [spoiler] Ness Commits Suicide by Berry December 3,2012 Nothing ever been the same since the death of Burtan.The Funeral was really quick, mostly cause of his love ones didn't showing up for which i found really odd because he was the lovable one.It was just me,ma, pa, and some few cousin that just happen to be a around.Nothing much but some few praches and occasional cries.I had to give a speech about how he was to young to die and how that departing from the earth will be better for him.After the funeral, we visited his lawyer to hear his will. It was the same ordinary thing like who gets who, what money goes to who. I wasn't surprise that much to see i was rarely mention in the will as me and my bro had a fallen out.Until the last part of the will.The lawyer looked grimly at me as if he was scared for my will being. He wanted this to be a private matter.As my family went home,The lawyer gived me a ordinary looking box.He told me that Burtan decided to give it to me cause he know i will make a good decision. I wish i was never born inmy life as i was to discover an ugly truth as i later found out. Whe i return home,i open the box. The box had the journal of Burtan,a copy of Melee and Brawl with a note that stated “I know you will make the correct decision”. I didn't really knew what that meant nor was i really interested at the games cause i only owned a Playstation 3.It never actually dawn to me why he give me his journal since he always called it for “sissy”, so this got me my attention later on.And my curiosity caught to me and read the first page. Burtan Wrote:September 6,2012 That was the end of this day. __________________________________________________________________________________________ December 6,2012 I was busy doing my job that i didn't get time to read the stuff that my brother wrote. So when the weekend came i didn't waste time to read. Burtan Wrote:September 13,2012 I was surprise that my brother made such a lie but deep inside i felt as if he was telling the truth _________________________________________________________________________________________ December 7, 2012 Where was i continueing,oh yeah i remenber now. Burtan Wrote:September 18,2012 That day finished really quickly and as i was about to close the book a paper felled out and as i read. The Newspaper Wrote:September 18,2012 I didn't slept this day. _________________________________________________________________________________________ December 12,2012 Sorry for being so late but i was spooked by the tale and didn't have the courage to read more. So here is some more. Burtan Wrote:September 20, 2012 I checked if there was loose paper and sure it was. The Newspaper Wrote:At September 21,2012 I didn't knew why he kept this so i kept reading. The Newspaper Wrote:At September 23,2012 There was a order of arrest to an individual named Burtan.It was stated by the police that they may finally caught the criminal. I was shocked that nobody told me of this one.But then again,My brother never tells me of anything,so id be the last person to know. ________________________________________________________________________________________ January 3 ,2013 As i went to the police station to see the interview of Burtan.I saw the following thing. The Interview Wrote:Police: Why did you kill the Three Victims!!!? Then the police gived me a Newspaper The Newspaper Wrote:At November 03,2012Then there was this one. The Interview Wrote:Burtan: Why is This Happening? Until now i realize why he did it. The Interview Wrote:Burtan:I admit,I did it. And as if i didn't knew already.The policeman gived me a Newspaper. The Newspaper Wrote:At November 23,2012.It has reported that the murderer Burtan has commited suicide by jumping on the river.Police states that he may be a psycopath..........Read more at MURDER SOLVED? At A3_____________________________________________________________________________________ Janaury 5,2012 It all makes sense now.Why he gived me these games.So this afternoon,i threw the box while it was on fire to the river where the deaths took place.As i did that a kid came to me and told me why i did it. Me: will because i finally understood why Kid: But why at the river. Now as though i was controlled i said “Beware of Jungle Japes kid.” Kid: WHY? Me: because...... But i was inturrupted by the kid. Kid: BECAUSE NESS COMMITED SUICIDE.[/spoiler] _________________________________________________________________________ SERIOUSLY THOUGH behind the Edit Version SERIOUSLY THOUGH Wrote:Here's the first part of the correction. Your English is really good, the main issue you have is that you make a lot of phonetic mistake - 'fallen out' rather than 'falling out'. I say read more English, rather than just watching videos or playing games, then you'll get the spelling rather than just the phonetic word. Then just some things about you using the indicative rather than the past tense, but other than that, you're English is pretty awesome (09-08-2012, 04:47 PM)SERIOUSLY THOUGH Wrote: Here's the edited roster part first of all __________________________________________________________________________________ The Perfect Version (The better,longer,improved version that include the extra scene of the unexplained Brawl's Death) [spoiler] NESS COMMITTED SUICIDE by Berry Revised by SERIOUSLY THOUGH December 3rd, 2012 Nothing has ever been the same since the death of Burtan. The funeral was really quick; mostly due to the fact that his loved ones didn't show up (which I found really odd because he was the lovable one). It was just me, ma, pa, and a few cousins that just happened to be around. Nothing much but some few preaches and occasional cries. I had to give a speech about how he was too young to die and how that departing from the earth would be better for him. After the funeral, we visited his lawyer to hear his will. It was the same ordinary thing; like who gets who, what money goes to whom. I wasn't much surprised to see that I was rarely mentioned in the will, as me and my bro had a falling out. Until the last part of the will… The lawyer looked grimly at me as if he were scared for my wellbeing. He wanted this to be a private matter. As my family went home, the lawyer gave me an ordinary looking box. He told me that Burtan had decided to give it to me because he knew I would make a good decision. I wish I was never born as I was to discover an ugly truth. Upon returning home, I opened the box. It contained Burtan’s journal, a copy of Melee and Brawl with a note that stated “I know you will make the correct decision”. I didn't really know what that meant, nor was I really interested with the games because I only owned a Playstation 3. It never actually dawned on me why he gave me his journal since he always said it was for “sissies”, and so this caught my attention later on. My curiosity got the better of me and I read the first page. Burtan Wrote:September 6th,2012 That was the end of this day. __________________________________________________________________________________________ December 6th, 2012 I was busy working that I didn't get time to read the rest of the stuff that my brother wrote. So when the weekend came, I didn't waste time and continued reading. Burtan Wrote:September 13th, 2012 I was surprise that my brother made such a lie, but deep inside I felt that he was telling the truth _________________________________________________________________________________________ December 7th, 2012 Where was I ? Oh yeah, I remember now. Burtan Wrote:September 18th ,2012 That day finished really quickly, and as I was about to close the book, a paper fell out… The Newspaper Wrote:September 18th,2012 I didn't sleep that day. _________________________________________________________________________________________ December 12th,2012 Sorry for being so late but I was spooked by the tale and didn't have the courage to read more. So here is some more. Burtan Wrote:September 20th, 2012 I checked if there was loose paper and there sure was. The Newspaper Wrote:September 21st,2012 I didn't know why he kept this so I kept reading. The Newspaper Wrote:On September 23rd,2012, there was an arrest warrant issued to an individual named Burtan. It was stated by the police that they may have finally caught the criminal. I was shocked that nobody told me about this (but then again, my brother never tells me anything, so I’d be the last person to know). January 3rd, 2013 Upon arrival at the police station, I found Burtan’s interview, it said the following. The Interview Wrote:Police: Why did you kill those three people!!!? Then the police gave me a Newspaper The Newspaper Wrote:November 03rd,2012 Then there was this one. The Interview Wrote:Burtan: Why is This Happening? Now, I realise why he did it. The Interview Wrote:Burtan: I admit; I did it. And as if I didn't already know. The policeman gave me a Newspaper. The Newspaper Wrote:At November 23rd, 2012. It has been reported that the murderer Burtan has commited suicide by jumping into the river. The Police states that he may be a psychopath..........Read more at “MURDER SOLVED?” on page 3_____________________________________________________________________________________ Janaury 5th, 2012 It all makes sense now. Why he gave me these games. So this afternoon, I threw the box – after setting it on fire – into the river where the deaths took place. As I did, a kid came to me and asked me why I was doing that. Me: Because I finally understood why... Kid: But why into the river. Now as though I was controlled by a greater force, I said “Beware of Jungle Japes, kid...” Kid: WHY? Me: because...... But I was interrupted by the kid. Kid: BECAUSE NESS COMMITED SUICIDE. [/spoiler] _______________________________________________________________________________ Here is the Credits [spoiler] H.Isidro: for helping me think of the first draft. R.Sanchez: cause he wanted a link. ![]() SERIOUSLY THOUGH: cause he made me think of that joke and helping to Revise it. Special Thanks to Felipegpm.To it,this wouldn't be possible . [/spoiler] Creepypasta! - Arjahn - 03-17-2013 So, creepypastas, we all know 'em and a lot of us like reading them, post your favorites here. Use spoiler tags at your own jurisdiction. My favorite has to be the creepy security camera one, here's a great rendition of it: [spoiler][/spoiler] RE: NESS COMMITTED SUICIDE - A Zombie Riot - 03-17-2013 (03-17-2013, 02:00 AM)Arjahn Wrote: Here, put this in the creepypasta thread I'm about to make. Show me the link and I can just merge the threads. Edit: Merged. BAM! Take that! RE: NESS COMMITTED SUICIDE - Arjahn - 03-17-2013 (03-17-2013, 02:04 AM)A Zombie Riot Wrote:(03-17-2013, 02:00 AM)Arjahn Wrote: Here, put this in the creepypasta thread I'm about to make. But... this thread is in General Discussion at the DYKG forums... YOU'VE BROKEN THE UNIVERSE AND ALL POSSIBLE TEXT EFFECTS ARE NECESSARY! RE: NESS COMMITTED SUICIDE - Berry - 03-17-2013 (03-17-2013, 02:21 AM)Arjahn Wrote:(03-17-2013, 02:04 AM)A Zombie Riot Wrote:(03-17-2013, 02:00 AM)Arjahn Wrote: Here, put this in the creepypasta thread I'm about to make. Dammit it,Zombie Riot,getting tired of your shenanigans. RE: Creepypasta! - Psychospacecow - 03-17-2013 What was the name of that samurai suicide again? I ain't leaving until someone does it! RE: Creepypasta! - CzarDragon - 03-17-2013 (03-17-2013, 03:25 AM)Psychospacecow Wrote: What was the name of that samurai suicide again? I ain't leaving until someone does it! hara kiri? RE: Creepypasta! - Psychospacecow - 03-17-2013 (03-17-2013, 03:55 AM)CzarDragon Wrote:(03-17-2013, 03:25 AM)Psychospacecow Wrote: What was the name of that samurai suicide again? I ain't leaving until someone does it! No, I don't think that was it. Was a joke that came up in the DYKG forum, though I don't remember what post. RE: Creepypasta! - Deathbringer - 03-17-2013 Seppuku? RE: Creepypasta! - Psychospacecow - 03-17-2013 (03-17-2013, 07:45 AM)Deathbringer Wrote: Seppuku? That's it. Now I can leave. RE: Creepypasta! - Arjahn - 06-09-2013 Welp, this has been dead for too long. ![]() Here's a damn good Creepypasta. [spoiler] [/spoiler] RE: Creepypasta! - DarkNerd - 06-11-2013 Oo! I love these! I mainly stick to Pokemon ones (though I will say that 90% are the exact same story) but here's one that's a doozy! ... I can't believe I just said doozy... The Night Shift [spoiler] The young nurse stood behind the counter, staring fixedly at the automatic doors and waiting impatiently for a trainer to come wandering in, seeking help. The Chansey next to her was dropping in and out of sleep and she knew she should tuck it into bed soon. Whenever she suggested that it should get some rest, it would look extremely offended and ignore her. She heard the familiar sound of the last ferry for the night announcing its arrival at the Vermillion City port. She felt a bit guilty for perking up. After a few minutes of waiting, the automatic doors zipped open and a teary-eyed young boy came wandering in. He was cradling a sickly looking Meowth in his arms and was sniffling uncontrollably. The Chansey immediately snapped out of its doze and hurried over around the counter to examine it. “P-p-poisoned!” The boy wailed as the Meowth let out a gurgling cry. “No need to cry. We can fix him up good as new,” the young woman said kindly as the boy continued to sob. “You just return him to his ball and we’ll make him better in no time at all,” she instructed and in the boy, wiping his nose on his sleeve, quickly returned the spluttering Meowth to its ball. The Chansey rubbed the boy’s back sympathetically as they waited for the Meowth to heal. None of them noticed as the automatic doors slid open and the shadowy figure that stumbled inside and collapsed into the nearest chair. “See! All better!” The young woman said brightly, passing the ball back into the boy’s hands. For good measure, she dug a brightly coloured sweet out of a jar and handed it to the still extremely shaken boy. “Look after yourself out there,” she said and the boy nodded weakly, wandering back outside, holding the poké ball tightly in his hand. The Chansey clucked its tongue in a concerned way and returned to its post behind the counter. The young woman yawned and rubbed her eyes a bit. She looked around and jumped slightly when she saw the huddled figure sitting one of the seats. The shadow was clutching its stomach and talking to its self. Thinking at first it might be one of the pet’s from the Fan Club she frowned at it. “Shoo! Get out!” The shape put its head up and she saw immediately that it wasn’t a Pokémon at all but a young girl around fourteen. Her face was grimy and deathly pale and she was extremly thin to the point of looking skeletal. The Chansey gave a little squeak of fright. “Oh I’m so sorry! I thought you were… never mind. What’s the matter?” She cried as she hurried over to the girl, helping her to her feet. The girl didn’t answer but whispered something low and intelligible under her breath. As soon as the young woman was near enough she saw immediately what the matter was. Under her dirty clothes the girl’s stomach bulged in the obvious sign of pregnancy. “…think me water’s broke…” the girl muttered to herself. The young woman’s jaw dropped and the Chansey’s eyes bulged out of its head. Why on earth had the girl come all the way here? Nearly all pregnant women in Kanto had their births at home with a nurse from the local Pokémon Centre right by their side. Travelling all the way to the Centre itself was very unusual. Panicking slightly, she led the girl over past the counter and into the emergency ward at the back. “Chansey, could you look after her as I call someone?” She fretted as she nearly sprinted back to the front desk. She was so busy, leafing through her little phone book she barely noticed the way the young girl recoiled away from the Chansey’s touch. After ten seconds of searching she finally found it. Sweat broke on her brow as she dialed the number of the other nurse in town. “Pickup, pickup, pickup…” She begged as the phone rang for what seemed like hours. “…H-h-hello?” A sleepy voice yawned from the end of the line. “It’s me, Joy! You’ve got to get in right away!” She nearly screeched down the phone. She heard the other nurse drop something in surprise and a barely muffled curse. “What’s the matter? Is it a decapitation? Or has someone been drained by a Zubat?” She replied, her voice suddenly alert and full of authority. “No, no, no! A girl’s come in and she’s going to have a baby!” She replied as there was a sudden loud shout from the next room. Shooting a terrified look behind her she heard a brief gasp of surprise from the phone and next minute the nurse had hung up. In record time the other nurse had come bustling in. Feeling an immediate sense of calm, the young woman led the more experienced nurse into the ward out back. The girl was lying on her back and her knees pointing to the ceiling. She had a pained, frightened look on her face that didn’t disappear as she saw the two women hurrying to her side. “Go get me some gloves and blankets please,” the other nurse said sharply but the Chansey had already beaten her to the job. The other nurse snapped on the gloves and put the blankets on the bedside table. “You have to control your breathing, honey,” she said kindly but the girl seemed to not hear her. The young woman looked on in half wonder, half disgust as she looked at the wailing girl. The long hours passed in screeches, panic and blood…the girl ignoring all commands given to her, lost in her own world of pain. Dawn was coming as the finally the newborn came into the world. The girl’s head lolled back into the pillow and she was finally quiet. Not even bothering to wipe the sweat from her eyes, the young woman quickly checked to see if she was still okay. She was as pale as paper, was sweating profusely and her heartbeat was faint. Feeling panic run through her again she turned to the other nurse. “She’s lost a lot of blood,” the other nurse said worriedly as she wrapped the gurgling baby into the blankets. “But at least the baby seems o… ERRRUUGGHHHH!” She broke off into a cry of utter repulsion dropping the newborn back onto the bed as if it were contaminated. The young woman stared at her in shock. “What on earth’s the matter with you?” She said as she hurried back to pick up the baby. She looked at it more closely as the other nurse made gagging noises. “Oh, how REVOLTING!” She screeched dropping the baby onto the bed again, feeling her stomach churn. The Chansey stared at them both and when she went to examine the baby a sad, solemn look crossed its face. “What is it, what is it?” The young woman whimpered, stumbling away. The other nurse, apparently recovering from her shock, took a few steps closer. The baby’s skin was a sickly, slimy yellow. Two moist tiny eyes one bigger than the other, set deeply into its head glistened up at them. It nose was long and drooped over its lower lip. It made pathetic squawking noises. Its skull was lumpy and misshapen and one of its arms was crumpled up uselessly against its side. After a few minutes of staring at the monstrosity the other nurse stumbled over to deadly quiet girl. “What’s your name, honey?” She said hoarsely as the girl stared, glassy-eyed at the ceiling. For what seemed like ages she made no sound and it seemed like she wouldn’t answer. Then her lips twitched and she said so quietly they all had to strain their ears to hear… “L…Lostelle.” The baby squirmed slightly at her feet. The other nurse looked at the girl for a few moments. “Who did this to you?” She asked her voice dropping to a whisper. The girl slowly shook her head and gave out soft protesting noises. As the nurse patted her arm sympathetically she screwed her eyes shut and shook her head more fiercely. The two nurses glanced at each other as the girl fell quiet once more, staring fixedly at the ceiling. They began to look for potions and medicines to help fight infections and to stem the blood flow. The Chansey, apparently the only one out of the three who was not completely revolted by the baby, carried it over to a nearby cot, normally used to store recovering Pokémon. “Please, honey, you have to drink this to get better,” the other nurse begged as she tried to force the potion down the girl’s throat. She seemed to not notice. “Don’t…want…to get…better,” she informed them as they both tried to pry her jaw open. The minutes ticked away and her heart beat grew fainter and fainter by the second. Her eyes rolled up towards the back of her skull and she began to mutter delusional things under her breath. “…didn’t listen…didn’t listen… such…lovely music,” she whispered, her head rolling from side to side, sweat pouring off of her forehead. Finally as her life drifted away she looked at them both clearly for the first time, her eyes glistening with unshed tears. “Kill it for me, kill it for me please,” she begged as the baby cawed from its cot. The other nurse’s lower lip was trembling as she tried once again to force the potion into her mouth. “Tell Daddy…I’m sorry I didn’t listen…” The young woman buried her head into the other nurse’s shoulder as the girl’s last breath escaped her lips and her whole body shuddered then finally lay deadly still.[/spoiler] |