So, uh. I have to write a personal statement.

[Kakariko Kid]

Second paragraph, first sentence. Maybe it should be rephrased to "I believe" or "I know". It changes the emphasis of your thought of how important technology is to, pretty much, the world depends on it and I'm going to be a part of it.

There are, of course, a few grammatical errors. But, it's a rough draft.
I like the way you're headed.